Timey Wimey - Prologue

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Possible to change some words of the translation.

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Visitor (Jorlem) said:

Instead of “What the book was telling is that”, you should probably use “What the book said is that”. Later on in that paragraph, “so that the time would follow” should be “so that time will follow”. Also, there is a space missing between two words in the last line of this speech bubble.

Finally, in Twilight's last speech bubble, instead of “proposed”, you should consider using the word “offered”.

Hope you don't mind the suggestions.

Jan 29, 2016

Visitor (GWMcHaffie) said:

You know, it's situations like this that perfectly illustrate just how horrifying Equestria truly is.

Jan 30, 2016

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